I
love the sound of shuffling paper…
a
search fruitless and loved
who wants to go first
sounds that you found
play with the form.
curious about the process…
strong, experimental, needs work…
The
rhyme is deadly.
Fucking
punctuation Nazis!
I might not be reading it close enough
in defense of the dashes
Tom and Jerry escapade
you have some real joys in it
random spurts of information
interesting and terrifying
it needs work – arrogant
see,
no capitals
The ending needs work
I love the ending
I wanted more…
don’t change a thing
I think there is a missed opportunity
here…
I would always keep in mind that…
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